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but you can have the glazed heat bursting from the blacktop like a broken
fire hydrant. You can have the jangle of keys
swinging from your hip with each stride.
You can have the tactility of leather and the graze of
bathroom mosaic tiles under a cold shower pelting
bullets and when the water cuts off
you can have dry book pages. You can have happiness,
though it will often be bitter, like finding a stranger’s
wallet full of pictures of smiling children until you
return it to find that the couple is barren.
You can have the scratches on the back of his knuckles,
faded, yet raw. You can have the translucency of sheets
in the sun, silhouettes but no details,
never revealing anything more than a fringe of hair
and frayed laces tripping over themselves.
You can drop obscenities like bombs until
they don’t mean anything anymore. You can pull out the Monopoly board
that broke your family. You can’t put it back together,
but you can pretend the thimble is your mother and the
car is your father and you own all the houses. And you can be thankful
for ink under your fingers, stamped letters wasted, thankful
for baldness because the chemo worked, for empty plastic bags
cluttered in your kitchen, for sleepy glances,
for doorknobs, for fingernails. You can have the hope chest,
the chest full of wedding mementos, the dress, the picture of you in it.
You can have the hat full of rabbit bones,
until the nightmare ends, you can have cerebral feats, the stitching
of skin, and furniture as broken as your heart.
You can’t expect him to notice you
but here is the rouge to teach you how to blush,
how to be coy, not shy,
until you don’t need it anymore, until you’re good enough,
and you believe it, know it, walk without heels
and feel tall anyway. And when romance fails you,
you still have the imprint of his hand on your cheek
when the red is gone, the distance of stars,
and the thunder that never came.
There is the fireplace that you can light at any time, if you’ve only a match,
and it will crackle, you can’t have it all,
but there is this.
An imitation of this poem by Barbara Ras for a poetry assignment. 40 lines, 15 sentences, 1 stanza. It's not due for two weeks and I'm already done with it. I am so ahead of the game this year. I feel like such an adult.

Notice the running title. I don't use those :la: I think they feel weird.

[EDIT] Well. I feel like I should talk about this piece more now, but I don't have anything to say - I just followed and imitated the original as closely as I could.

I'm always surprised by a DD, but this one really did come out of nowhere. I mean, didn't I just get one on Escape Velocity :lol: Careful yall, I'm going to end up with a habit.

Shoutout to `vespera and ^GrimFace242 for the feature! Thank you!
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Given 2013-09-24
You can't have it all by `SilverInkblot ( Suggested by vespera and Featured by GrimFace242 )
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LiliWrites Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can honestly say that I enjoyed your poem more than the one it is modeled after. :) Congratulations on your DD! 
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SilverInkblot Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! At least two other people have told me the same thing, so I did something right :XD:
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GrimmAssassin Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm wasn't sure whether to sob or smile at the end of this, and I ended up doing both :3

It reminds me of dark chocolate - bitter, yet full of flavor.
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GrimmAssassin Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*throws cookies* :D
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SilverInkblot Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The piece we were trying to imitate was like that - full of both happy and sad images, high things and common things. So this is a great compliment; I got to the heart of what the assignment was about :D
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flummo Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is stunning, really. Congratulations on the DD. :heart:
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SilverInkblot Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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chancerox Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i really love the metaphors in this; they're beautifully unique! 
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SilverInkblot Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Haikumato Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Immediately when I saw this I just had to read it out loud. And wow did it feel awesome and epic to do so. I really liked this, amazing job from you! :meow: :)
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