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I was attracted by the title reference and I'm glad I stopped by because I quite enjoyed this :D It's so overflowing with detail and finds all the senses, something I really like in a written piece. I guess I'm just a sucker for imagery.

I like the idea of tea that you've used here - the types you've chosen really do sound like names and it's rather clever. I believe I've had all of these types except darjeeling, and the letters match my recollections of what each one tastes like. The entire piece feels very warm and comforting, exactly how tea should be :heart:

To me, the earl grey section is especially spot on as I've spent many winter nights with cups of that stuff and it's a perfect image you've matched to it :D I don't think there's a weak section at all; each letter has it's own charms and is very different from the other three.

If I wanted to be nitpicky, I'd complain about the lack of capitalization, but that's a stylistic thing and whether it appeals to you or not seems to come down to personal preference. I don't think the lack of them added anything for me, but I don't think it took away either, except to gnaw at my occasional grammar Nazi tendencies.

I think the only real critique I have is that, the tea theme aside, the sections are a little segregated. I feel like there's more story under here somewhere that could be teased out. And I guess that's not really critique, just me wanting more :XD:
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:iconglossolalias:
haha; this was actually longer, originally. there were seven teas rather than four, but then i had the four with the "four seasons" wrapped up in them and jasmine&chamomile sounded too similar... so i ended up whittling it down to these.
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SilverInkblot Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I thought I was getting a seasonal vibe. I don't know why I didn't mention it in the critique ^^;
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:iconglossolalias:
haha, it's cool P: it's definitely more of a ~background detail~ than ~the point of the piece~
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